ANTAGONISTS

I’m hearing that echo on Sweet Caroline…”so good! so good!”…..

Andrew Joyce

There are many antagonists in Resolution. Here are three of the more prominent: 1) Murderers, 2) Wolves, and 3) the most dangerous—the extreme Yukon cold when it’s seventy degrees below zero.

Jim Bridger

Murderers:

Huck, tiring of the conversation, picked up the bottle and filled his and Molly’s glasses. Jass’ was still full. “Alright, Mister Knight, how do you plan on doing it? Take us out back and shoot us?

“I must say you are taking this like a gentleman. No crying or begging for mercy?”

“Would I get any?”

“Any what?”

“Mercy.”

“Most likely not.”

Huck looked at Molly and nodded.

She stood with such force that she knocked her chair backwards and it started to fall. She had her gun out and in her hand before the chair hit the floor. The scraping noise of the chair as Molly stood turned the men’s attention from the gold to the…

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  1. You wrote: “The scraping noise of the chair as Molly stood turned the men’s attention from the gold to the table. It was the last act of their lives. Molly had a bullet into each one of them before they knew they were dead.”

    If an editor at a major publishing house read that sentence in the first paragraph of your submission, he or she would shitcan the entire manuscript without bothering to look at the rest of it. You wouldn’t even get a rejection note because they’d never want to hear from you again. I won’t tell you what’s wrong with it. See if you can figure it out. If you can or if you can’t, it remains the signature of a bad writer.

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